Love is like heaven
But it can hurt like hell
It all started when love
Rang my door bell
Head over heels
Into love I fell
Shot in the heart
Under cupid's spell
I was happy with love
So I figured oh well
Everyone knew I was in love
It wasn't hard to tell
But they didn't know
I was going through hell as well
He pushed me around
Kicked me when I fell
It was hard to leave
I was caught under his spell
I always made my family proud
Truthfully, I was afraid to fail
I used to be so strong and free
It felt like love locked me in a cell
I let love get the best of me
So this is my farewell
This is my warning to all
Be careful of love
Make sure its true
Or the same thing
That happened to me
Could happen to you
this is reslly good! i like how your peoms and stug=ff arnet liek normal but that you tell a story with it =, we are so used to hearing like rymes that we have to inturprut to the way we desire your we have to do that but we also get a story to us to!! brava brava
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot. I'm trying to become more of a storyteller through my poetry. But overall I want to become well rounded with my poetry. Have a couple come to own conclusion, double entendres etc. Thanks again for the feedback
ReplyDeletewow it is so...beautiful thanks for sharing take care
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting baili! Very appreciated
ReplyDeletehttp://www.flickr.com/photos/rickstar2010/4280924972/in/photostream/ i was thinking of this poem while taking this pic we should start a blog together you write ill take the pics to match the story im telling you we could make a book!!! thnk bout it!
ReplyDeletewe should use this one i will credit ur photography sites
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